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21-11-04, 01:36 PM
They say money is the root of all evil
So tell me why does it bring out the worse in people
Fake friends,
Backstabbers
Lies and cheats
Suspiciously watching others you happen to meet.
Chasing a dream often ends in a financial reward
Is money equated with happiness or is this notion floored
Is there something more?
Where we lack understanding.
Is it found in science?
Religion?
Or our own thought ramblings.
Where lies the truth?
The proof...
Is our existence uncouth?
Or is the world perfect which is why a god remain aloof.
Taken aback
Standing back,
Fromthe war, deceit and crimes
The world used to be mine now is seems in steady decline
The sunshine
Is not as defined
Realigned with despair
Scared to declare we care
And end this nightmare
Is this just the way the world is..?
As its meant to be
Pre-empt the contempt
Is our discontent the key?
The incense inside of me
Immense,
Cements worldwide you see
Applied equals angry...it guides people and me
The governmental bodies haven't got the mental to govern
Living in your own land hotter than an oven
Bombs mean scorching bodies
Children dying
Hard to survive
We derive our own supplies with no regard we deprive
Graveyard or alive?
We safeguard our goodbyes with artillery
Such negativity
Does not allow us to remove the chains of captivity
Reality is such,
Too much
It touches on apprehensive
Behaviour ostensive
On the brink
Bordering on pensive
No time to lament as weunite this hour
No stopping as we fight the power
Poor people to those in power so unequal
They shower us with evil
So join me when I say power to the people
Backed up with deeds not word all hollow and see through
Yes your people need you
Guaranteed, indeed to free you
Not just from a physical but from a mental corruption
The option..
Is clear as clean water
No more self-destruction
The interruption
Abdcution,
Seduction that is endemic
So thorough it's systemic
Enslaving mentalities
[size=3][font="Times New Roman"]Like an epidemic......
S.H.O.W.M.A.N
Significant History Omitted While Misleading African Nations
Strengthening Hold On Where My Ancestors Nucleated
Submersed Heritage Overpowering Will Maintaining Adherence to Naija
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WWW.DSA-NIGERIA.ORG
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22-11-04, 09:42 AM
Never a truer word spoken. These are not just ur thoughts but the thoughts of others as well, delivered in such a way that it has an impact on u as soon as u start reading, because it makes u think. I like ur style, keep it up
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22-11-04, 08:49 PM
Cheers facetygal...thanks for the big up...niceone.gif...got a range of poetry in different styles covering different topics...may post more up in here in the near future....
S.H.O.W.M.A.N
Significant History Omitted While Misleading African Nations
Strengthening Hold On Where My Ancestors Nucleated
Submersed Heritage Overpowering Will Maintaining Adherence to Naija
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WWW.DSA-NIGERIA.ORG
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22-11-04, 08:53 PM
You should post dem, don't hog dem to urself! U know the saying share & share alike niceone.gif
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22-11-04, 08:59 PM
Yeah but i'll lose out inprofitsin mypoetry book...niceone.gif 
S.H.O.W.M.A.N
Significant History Omitted While Misleading African Nations
Strengthening Hold On Where My Ancestors Nucleated
Submersed Heritage Overpowering Will Maintaining Adherence to Naija
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WWW.DSA-NIGERIA.ORG
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22-11-04, 09:26 PM
Ok do likkle previews then, just to wet the appetite. Let me know when the book hits the shelves
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23-11-04, 10:29 PM
@Mythoughts. Good poem and very well written. No poet but I know what I like. Read the first third when you first posted and thought very good up to that point. Did not have the mental energy to go further and do it justice and consistency. Came back read other two thirds and then all together.
One comment. Sightly a tad and only a tad long for my ideal taste. But reads very well. Cunjures up very clear images for me.
Very good.
Keep it up.
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23-11-04, 10:39 PM
@FB
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To be honest i'm kind of like you or your posts...when it comes to writing poetry...just so happens it invariably ends up long...smoking-devil...mainly because there is always something to add and always another angle...or thought...that u feel should not be left out...as it adds more rather than takes away from what is being said...
But thanx for the big up...niceone.gif
@facetygal
I may give u likkle previews...but you one...no one else...LOL...I'll give BN the heads up when my stuff comes out... 
S.H.O.W.M.A.N
Significant History Omitted While Misleading African Nations
Strengthening Hold On Where My Ancestors Nucleated
Submersed Heritage Overpowering Will Maintaining Adherence to Naija
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WWW.DSA-NIGERIA.ORG
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23-11-04, 11:48 PM
Ohhh I get special treatment, like the sound of dat! Well baby u can step into my PM anytime, with or without the poems! redkiss
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24-11-04, 07:39 PM
That is Hotblksmoke. You are a serious inspiration to me to step my game up. I'm glad you posted this poem because now I know what kind of competition I"ll be dealing with in the literary world. Keep up the good workblk2cheers2
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12-01-05, 08:11 PM
@ My thoughts.........Nice writing!niceone.gif
\'Rudeness is the weakman\'s imitation of strength\'
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